there are some nice touches in there, but way too cheesy, imo. if i could change a few things, i'd say change ur crash, and take out the 1,2,1,2,3,4 crashes before drops! the opening moments are good, why dont you hang on to that nice morningy trance touch. the gated strings mite sound cooler if they have more rhythm. i like the clicks and the percussion as it slowly builds up. there are some synth parts in there that would work if u fucked em up a little more.
when i write, i try and double-think every sound until its completely different. if i have a kick and a bass in the break, thats a bit plain, so maybe i'll bounce it down and take the low freqs out. but then i suppose i could go one step further and stick a smooth bandpass filter on it. and also pan it. and then maybe automate some bitcrusher on it. and then form a little rhythm out of it. this degree of progression on each sound can lead to none of your sounds sounding anything like 'normal' instruments and sounds at all.
everything in moderation, including the trippy fx, but this track has so many normal sounds which would be alot cooler if they were twisted slightly to make it more interesting imho.
the crash and the bass are ubercheesey to me... maybe try dropping acid before working on this next?